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Senin, 26 Mei 2014

Writing III Descriptive Text : 'You Are the Apple of My Eye'


            ‘You are the apple of my eye’ this idiom is very suitable to I Gusti Ayu Made Novitasari. She is my girlfriend and I love her so much. She was born on November 4th 1995 in Buleleng. Now she lives in Singaraja and studies at Japanese Education department UNDIKSHA SINGARAJA. My girlfriend is so beautiful and very care with me as her boyfriend but she still reach a ton of achievement as a student. I’m so proud of her.
            My girlfriend who called ‘Intan’ in her daily activity is a very beautiful girl. She has a Chinese appearance from her mother like slanted-eyes, white complexion, and straight hair. She who also called ‘Nuo Hui Can’ in Chinese has 160 cm height and 46 cm weight. It makes her looks ideal not too fat and not too thin.

            She is always care with me. When I was sick in my boarding house I cannot get up for a week but she visited me almost every day. She brought me some porridge and medicine after her class and accompanied me for one hour every day. I was so touched with her concern because I know she has many things to do like her assignment and business family. That’s make me feel so happy because I love the right girl.
            She had spent her time with me since she started her study at UNDIKSHA but looks like it doesn’t affect her achievement as student. At the beginning she reached achievement as queen of Japanese education department, and then she also reached the 2nd runner-up position in Putera Puteri UNDIKSHA 2014. Recently, she competed in duta GENRE kabupaten Bueleleng 2014 along with me and luckily we got 2nd runner up puteri for her and 2nd runner-up putera for me. Her score in class was also wonderful. She got the 2nd place for the best student in her class last semester.

            Indeed, now she become one of important person to me. A beautiful girl who care about you most and has many achievement, who do not want to have a girlfriend like that? Yes I’m so lucky to be with her. She is really ‘The apple of my eye’
              


8 komentar:

  1. finally you find a girl who give you a real love and not just a hope. Heheeee,,
    long last my friend,,

    BalasHapus
  2. I just want say "long last" my friend~

    BalasHapus
  3. i just want to add something di. may be you can use "care" rather than "concern". i think it would be better to read. overall it was so interesting to read your love story adi :) long last :)

    BalasHapus
  4. you know, it is so romantic
    lucky you! :p
    well, I think your second point "my girlfriend is so concern with me", maybe you can change the word "concern" with another one. but it is up to you because we write with no pressure. i just think that it isn't suitable for this context. thank you :D

    BalasHapus
  5. well thank you for the correction both Dhina and chandra, I hope both of you will find the correct boy ^^ *ehh

    BalasHapus
  6. best couple. so romantic.long last friend :)

    BalasHapus